October 4
Take her, our poppet
Tears shed as the cart moves on
Bell, bring out the dead
Unexpected and heartbreaking. Nice take on the prompt! It amazes me how much can be conveyed in such short poems.
Thanks! That's my favorite part about haikus. They say little, but mean much.
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Thread through a needle,
a smile full of pennies,
ashen hill of kings.
Feels like a level up from yesterday!
I’ll say it’s a level up, nice!
Needle in the eye,
As she screams, another in the heart-
Dead mother-in-law.
Hope you’ll forgive the slight breaking of the 5-7-5 formula, but many modern haikus do this😂
Personally, I feel like breaking the form makes it a different kind of poem. But I do understand these things are kind of linked to individual tastes.
At any rate, I like this one! Glad you posted it😁
Thanks! Well, from what I understand, most haiku-ists don’t consider the number of syllables to be essential, just the three lines, the two juxtaposed images/image + context, and the fact that the haiku should encompass a flash of insight.
Oh yeah, you’re 100% right. I’m just a fickle/stubborn beast and apply rules rather contrarily😅.
Take her, our poppet
Tears shed as the cart moves on
Bell, bring out the dead
Unexpected and heartbreaking. Nice take on the prompt! It amazes me how much can be conveyed in such short poems.
Thanks! That's my favorite part about haikus. They say little, but mean much.
🧵
Thread through a needle,
a smile full of pennies,
ashen hill of kings.
Feels like a level up from yesterday!
I’ll say it’s a level up, nice!
Needle in the eye,
As she screams, another in the heart-
Dead mother-in-law.
Hope you’ll forgive the slight breaking of the 5-7-5 formula, but many modern haikus do this😂
Personally, I feel like breaking the form makes it a different kind of poem. But I do understand these things are kind of linked to individual tastes.
At any rate, I like this one! Glad you posted it😁
Thanks! Well, from what I understand, most haiku-ists don’t consider the number of syllables to be essential, just the three lines, the two juxtaposed images/image + context, and the fact that the haiku should encompass a flash of insight.
Oh yeah, you’re 100% right. I’m just a fickle/stubborn beast and apply rules rather contrarily😅.