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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Firework trials with rats and voles

prepared my life as designer:

my guineapigs now called astronauts.

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Honeygloom's avatar

Oh my😵

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Songsterfunsterhamster's avatar

Our sky now blooms with

Its pyrotechnic acne

Like a teenage cheek

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Honeygloom's avatar

Fantastic, love that you reversed the common trope of glory and beauty🖤

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Caro Henry's avatar

Dear Doug, I’m blown away 😏 by your words.

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Songsterfunsterhamster's avatar

Caro, I silver salute 😏 you

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Caleb Taylor's avatar

This is so clever. I’d restack it, but I’m not sure how to do that with a comment

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Songsterfunsterhamster's avatar

I’m massively flattered by this: thank you.

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A.C. Cargill, Author's avatar

Dark night now alight

With colors streaming, bursting

My eyes behold all

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Honeygloom's avatar

Love the last line, it’s eerily omniscient.

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A.C. Cargill, Author's avatar

I knew that. giggle

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Richard Blaisdell's avatar

Great balls-afire one song sang

The explosion-implosion

Rocked the sky-stars high lights

Global glows . China knows.

Landing on dark side of moon.

You remember the lyrics from that tune.

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Honeygloom's avatar

Ooo ominous, well done🖤

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Dylan Delgado's avatar

Red and yellow bursts;

Rattle my tiny eardrums,

Forcing me to hide

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Honeygloom's avatar

That detail in the middle line is so striking, it really elicits some interesting imagery🖤

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Caleb Taylor's avatar

Bright colored night sky

Smoke explodes throughout the night

As our climate dies

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Honeygloom's avatar

Brutal! But so important to say, well done🖤

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David Perlmutter's avatar

"Look at the dog; she thinks someone's been shot..."

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Honeygloom's avatar

I’ve always wondered what they’re thinking…

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Steven Vickers's avatar

Fireworks mock the proud

"Remember to be afraid!"

Not me, sugar cheeks

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Honeygloom's avatar

Wish I had your fortitude 😌🖤

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Chris J. Franklin's avatar

In ancient China,

They sought immortality,

But found gunpowder... 😎

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Honeygloom's avatar

Ha! Yes, quite the opposite 😏

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Chris J. Franklin's avatar

Haha! Although, I'm sure it did blow their minds when they discovered it... 😎

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