8 Comments
User's avatar
erniet's avatar

Remnant of life past

Compacted, excavated

To burn in my forge.

Expand full comment
Honeygloom's avatar

I like the breadth you span before you bring it back down to daily life. Very cool.

Expand full comment
ClownWorld Shakespeare's avatar

Eyes black as midnight

Like coal buried under dusk

Reveals rocky soul

Expand full comment
Honeygloom's avatar

Very cool description, I love the imagery this brings up.🖤

Expand full comment
User's avatar
Comment removed
Dec 3, 2023
Comment removed
Expand full comment
Honeygloom's avatar

Coal is pretty cool as a part of geologic history, that’s for sure. I like the dichotomy you invoke here, it’s thought provoking.

Expand full comment
User's avatar
Comment removed
Dec 4, 2023
Comment removed
Expand full comment
Honeygloom's avatar

Hey nice! Congrats on your first haiku! I have a haiku how to pinned to the top of my Horror Haiku section if you’re interested in learning more.

Hope to see you around!

Expand full comment
User's avatar
Comment deleted
Dec 3, 2023
Comment deleted
Expand full comment
Honeygloom's avatar

This made me picture The Little Engine that Could shoveling its conductors into the fire to get over the hill.

Expand full comment
User's avatar
Comment deleted
Dec 3, 2023
Comment deleted
Expand full comment
Honeygloom's avatar

A noble sacrifice for the cause.

Expand full comment