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Richbee's avatar

Darkness rests on chests

Light pressure to heavy heaves

A succubus crushes the flames

Last light from your dreams.

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Honeygloom's avatar

That last line is so good!! I want to write a whole novel about it🖤

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Richbee's avatar

Batteries come included.

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Mine wasn't very poetic. I was too busy thinking "cool".

Very interesting topic and I loved your haiku. Far more dignified than mine.

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Honeygloom's avatar

If there was one of these weird vampires that I’d want to be, I think it would be this one. Imagine just becoming flame 🔥

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A.P. Murphy's avatar

Sprinkled down rice at the crossroads

Fireball woman flummoxed in counting

I chewed up her skin right then

so she ain't got nowhere to go

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Honeygloom's avatar

Awesome!! I love the OCD aspect to vampires like this. Also the narrative voice is great, really gives it some flavor.

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Honeygloom's avatar

Nice! I love the direction this took!

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