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Stephanie Valente's avatar

Oooh loved this one.

Honeygloom's avatar

Thank you!!

Gregory Blair's avatar

Whoa! I love the twisting this story does: how you offer (and remind us of) the real magic of good deeds ... and then, when that's a disappointment to the pathetic "my way or I'm unhappy" client , you give her what she thinks she wants ... and a lesson is learned. (And it still turns into a (dark) happy ending.

Honeygloom's avatar

Ha! Thank you for reading 🙏

Saint-Lazare's avatar

Wonderful, really wonderful story.

Honeygloom's avatar

Thank you 🙏

A.P. Murphy's avatar

Powerful, with fine paced dialogue, HG.

Honeygloom's avatar

Thank you! I’m not 100% happy with the ending, but it passes lol.

A.P. Murphy's avatar

When in doubt have a mass killing with the suggestion of total societal transformation, I always say.

Could be expanded to novella length and beyond, but of course that's true of all your short pieces. (Just an observation not a call to action)

Honeygloom's avatar

You’re not wrong, I think that’s why I’m frequently unhappy with endings…